读后续写练习写作：人与社会——superhero没有superpower.docx

读后续写练习写作：人与社会SUPerherO没有superpower第二节（满分25分）阅读下面材料，根据其内容和所给段落开头语续写两段，使之构成一篇完整的短文。Itwasacold,snowyevening.Tommywasrunningasfastashecould,focusedonnothingbuthisdestinationtheshoponthestreetcorner.Twoweeksago,hesawfigurines（小雕像）ofMarvelsuperheroesontheshelvesandfelthehadtohaveone.He'sbeenwalkingtheneighbor'sdogeversincethentoearnmoneytorealizehislittledream.Hewassoexcitedandhardlynoticingtheworldaroundhim.Maybethat'swhyhetrippedoverthelegsofahomelesswoman,whowassittingonthesidewalk,herbackagainstthewall.Hcmurmured"sorry"andmovedontohisdestination.Onceheenteredtheshop,hewentstraighttotheshelveswithfigurines.Hulk1Thor,CaptainAmerica,IronMan,andmanymore一allofhisadmiredheroes.WithhisheartpoundinglikecrazyhereachedforSpiderman.,Youlikethese,truebeliever?"Tommyturnedaround.noldmanwasstandingbehindhimwithawidesmileonhisface.',Y-yes.Yes,they'reawesomeJ,'answeredTommy."They'restrongandfastandhelpotherpeoplealot."theboylookedatfigurinesinadmiration.1'lwishIcouldbeasuperherotoo."“Thenbecomeone!"saidtheoldman."How?"Tommyaskedinsurprise."Idon'thaveanysuperpowers/'"Andwhywouldyouneedthem7"theoldmansmiled.Seeingtheconfusionontheboy'sface,heSqUatted（蹲F）andputhishandsonTommy'sarms.',Didyouknow,thatshopkeeperladyovertherehasadisabledhusband?She'sbeenworkinghardandtakingcareofhimforyears.I'veneverheardawordofcomplaintfromher.Andthisperson"hepointedataredheadman,whojustenteredtheshop."He'safirefighter;he'ssavedcountlesslives.Henevergivesup,nomatterhowdangerousthesituationseemstobe."TheoldmanlookedTommyintheeyesandsmiled."Youdon'tneedasuperpowertobeaheroforsomeoneelse.Thepathofasuperherostartsnotinthemind,notinthemuscles,butintheheart."Paral:Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoesthinkingintensely.Para2:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime.写作解析0.确定人称：第三人称1.极理原文情节：Tommy;theoldman;thehomelesswoman2,确定主题？3.构思情节Pl:Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoesthinkingintensely.衔接1:Tommy想什么？什么心情？-困惑，在思考老人的话Tommy意识到啥+问老人+老人没说话+微笑Tommy若有所思+放回Spiderman+买了面包和水+离开storeP2:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime.侑接3:Tommy:走近+给+说theoldwoman的反应：惊讶T感动+结果Offer还没等thewoman反应过来，TOmmy已经跑远。TOmmy的感悟：成文SUPerher。并不需要超能力或者商面定格：TOmmy在风雪中奔跑回家，感觉自己就是一个超级英雌【参考范文一】Pl:Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoesthinkingintensely.Hismindwashauntedbytheoldman'swords：,Thepathofasuperherostartsintheheart."Suddenly,WithanideaignitinginTommy'smind,heliftedhiseyesandinquiredearnestly,"YoumeanIcanbethesuperherobyhelppeopleinneed?"Theoldmanofferednoverbalresponse,yethisbeamingsmilespokevolumes,affirmingTommy'squestionwithsilentreassurance.TommyduckedhisheadandgazedattheSpidermaninhishand,ponderingforamomentbeforegentlyplacingitbackontheshelf.Armedwithnewresolve,heusedhishard-earnedmoneytopurchasebreadandwaterbeforestridingoutofthestorewithoutabackwardglance.P2:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime.lieapproachedhercautiously,murmuring,"Thisisforyou/'hisvoicetingedwithablendoftensionandawkwardness.Startled,theoldwomanlookedup,andwithinmoments,hereyeswelledupwithtearsassheacceptedthefoodshakily.Beforeshecouldutteraword,Tommyhadalreadydashedawayintothebustlingstreets.Allthewayalong,theimageofthewoman'sface,etchedwithappreciation,replayedinTommy'smind.Withhisfirststeponthepathtobecomingasuperhero.Tommydiscoveredthatitwasmuchsimplerthanhehadeverimagined.参考范文二】Pl:Tommyloweredhisheadandlookedathisshoesthinkingintensely.Finally,heraisedhishead."SoIamsupposedto."hestoppedmid-sentencewhenherealizedthathewasalone.Heturnedhisheadleftandright,buttheoldmanwasnowheretobeseen.Tommysighedheavily-healreadyhadanideaofwhatheshoulddo.Helookedatfigurinesforthelasttime/gavefigurinesonelastglanceandmovedtowardsthecounter."Twosandwichesandacupofteaplease,“hesaid.(Thenext.SeCOndfoundTommyWaIkCdfast,OrratherdashedOutOftheshop,CarefuIIyWatChingOUtforthelady.)PZ:Thehomelesswomanwasrightthere,wherehesawherlasttime.Tommycamecloserandcarefullygavethewomanhisbuys.Hereyesopenedwideinsurprise,thenfilledwithtears.“Thankyou/'shewhispered.Tommybowedhishead,turnedaroundandwentbackhome.Hewasmovingfasterandfasterandfinallyhestartedtorun.Strangeenergyfillinghisbodymadehimfeellikehecouldfly.Whenhefinallystopped,hewasbreathingheavily,buthedidn'tfeeltired.Hesmiledhappily-itwasawonderfulfeeling.Andnothingcouldstopit.Thelady'sSimPIeWOrdSbubbledinhismind,pointingtohisnewfoundtruththatOnCtrulyCanbeaSUPerheroWithOUtSUPerPOWerS或RUnninginIheChillywinds.TornmynoIOngCrfeltcold,butburnedWiththeioyOfbeingaSUPerhero.)