雅思大作文详解3：家庭中男女分工.docx

【9分作文盛宴】考官华丽雅思大作文详解3：家庭中男女分工Simon是英国曼彻斯特的前雅思索官，由于创办雅思索试学习网站而在全世界的考生中越来越出名气。其网站上供应大量关于复习雅思的技巧以及颠覆性的建议，甚至还有不少Simon本人亲笔写的满分作文。这些满分作文由于出自英国考官之手，特别地道，言简意赅,和中国考生惯用的千篇一律的模板作文相比，着实让人眼前一亮。点课台的PhOebe老师深感有义务要让孩子们接触到真正可以提分的好作文，所以以后会频繁地帮大家整理并总结这些满分作文的精华，信任大家都可以扔掉模板，写出高分作文！今日我们来讲一篇大作文，以一些FamilyToPiC的作文为例，重点讲一下什么是文章的SkeletonoSimoni,theskeleton(orframeworkorbasicstructure)ofatask2essay15: theintroduction topicsentencesformainparagraphs andtheconclusion就是说，他认为文章的Skeleton(就是文章的框架或基本结构)就是开头介绍、主体段落和结论段落。在写作文之前先写Skeleton我们来看一下Simon写的一个Skeleton：Peoplehavedifferentviewsaboutwhetherparentsorschoolsshouldbeartheresponsibilityforhelpingchildrentobecomegoodcitizens.Tnmyview,thisresponsibiIityshouldbeshared.Ontheonehand,parentscertainlyhaveavitalroletoplayintheupbringingoftheirchildren.Ontheotherhand,schoolteachersmaycontributealmostasmuchasparentstothedevelopmentofachild.Inconclusion,bothparentsandschoolsshouldworktogethertoensurethatyoungpeoplebecomepoliteandproductivemembersofsociety.大家可以看出，Simon写的SkeletOn已经把这篇作文的信息表达得特别清晰了，惟一缺失的就是主体段落，即其次、三段中的细节。SimOn建议大家在写作文之前都把SkeIetOn写到这种程度。接下来给大家带来Simon最闻名的建议之大作文只要写13句。分布在各个段落中的名子数量如下：,Introduction:2sentences Firstmainbodyparagraph:5sentences Secondmainbodyparagraph:5sentences Conclusion:1sentence有的同学可能会担忧字数太少，Simon说假如大家看他的作文看多了，you,11seethatTusuallymanagetowrite250wordsormoreinthisway.Tthinkitseemsalotlessscaryifyouthinkthatyourtaskistowritejust13sentences!雅思索官的满分作文都写250+,所以大家也不必一味追求字数，重点还是在于文章的内容，当然了，13句话也不是肯定的，SinIon提示大家：ItiSnota'rule'thatyoumustwrite13sentences.Thisisjustmyapproachormethod.大家写作文的时候要依据自己的状况而定。接下来以这篇作文为例，大家先自己试着写一下Skeleton,然后和Simon写的做下比较ThesedaysmorefathersstayathomeandtakecareoftheirchiIdrenwhilemothersgoouttowork.Whatcouldbethereasonsforthis?Doyouthinkitisapositiveoranegativedevelopment?Here,sSimon,ssampleessayskeleton:IntroductionTtistruethatmenareincreasinglylikelytotakeontheroleofhousehusband,whilemorewomenthaneverarethebreadwinnersintheirfamilies.Therecouldbeseveralreasonsforthis,andIconsiderittobeaverypositivetrend.Mainbody1,topicsentenceInrecentyears,parentshavehadtoadapttovariouschangesinoursocieties.Mainbody2,topicsentenceInmyview,thechangesdescribedaboveshouldbeseenasprogress.ConclusionInconclusion,thechangingrolesofmenandwomeninthefamilyarearesultofwiderchangesinsociety,andTbelievethatthesedevelopmentsaredesirable.大家的Skeleton是否清晰表达了整篇文章的观点和结构呢?是否发觉自己写的文章比以往更加精简了呢?Simon说,FormanyofthestudentsT,vetaught,abreakthrough(orbigimprovement)camewhentheyfoundtheconfidencetowriteinamore'simple*way.Simon认为，当你不再纠结文章中是否包含passives,conditionalsor*difficultacademicwords,的时候，youarefreetofocusonansweringthequestionandexplainingyourideasCoherently.你就会将留意力放在如何顺畅地表达你的观点。Tttakesconfidencetochangeyourapproachandtobelievethatthe'simple'waywillWork.这会更加自信用更加SiInPIe的方式来写作。点课台老师提示大家，这里说的SimPIe,肯定不是Easy!要想写出高分文章，还是要在Vocabulary>Grammar>Idea三个方面下苦功！这就贴出完整范文：Itistruethatmenareincreasinglylikelytotakeontheroleofhousehusband,whilemorewomenthaneverarethebreadwinnersintheirfamilies.Therecouldbeseveralreasonsforthis,andIconsiderittobeaverypositivetrend.Inrecentyears,parentshavehadtoadapttovariouschangesinoursocieties.Equalrightsmovementshavemadegreatprogress,andithasbecomenormalforwomentogainqualificationsandpursueacareer.Tthasalsobecomesociallyacceptableformentostayathomeandlookaftertheirchildren.Atthesametime,therisingcostoflivinghasmeantthatbothmarriagepartnersusuallyneedtoworkandsavemoneybeforestartingafamily.Therefore,whencoupleshavechildren,theymaydecidewhoworksandwhostaysathomedependingonthepersonalpreferenceofeachpartner,orbasedonwhichpartnerearnsthemostmoney.Inmyview,thechangesdescribedaboveshouldbeseenasprogress.Weshouldbehappytoliveinasocietyinwhichmenandwomenhaveequalopportunities,andinwhichwomenarenotputunderpressuretosacrificetheircareers.Equally,itseemsonlyfairthatmenshouldbefreetoleavetheirjobsinordertoassumechildcareresponsibiIitiesifthisiswhattheywishtodo.Couplesshouldbelefttomaketheirowndecisionsaboutwhichparentalroleeachpartnertakes,accordingtotheirparticularcircumstancesandneeds.Inconclusion,thechangingrolesofmenandwomeninthefamilyarearesultofwiderchangesinsociety,andIbelievethatthesedevelopmentsaredesirable.(274words,band9)LastbutnottheIeaSt,点课台的PhOebC老师来帮大家整理一下范文中的重点词汇breadwinners:特别好玩的合成词，字面上“挣面包的人”，引申为“养家糊口的人”equalrightsmovements:这个词组也常常被用到女性话题的大作文中，“公平权利运动”qualifications:“资格，资格”，特别高频的单词，它的各种形式都要背牢。sacrificetheircareers:“牺牲事业”。点课台老师建议大家单词最好放到词组里背，这样才能知道怎么单词怎么用assume:这里表示“担当”。此外一个意思在雅思索试中也很常见，“假定”今日就到这里，盼望能够对大家有所关心，下期见！需要更多写作技巧的点击这里！相关文章【雅思索官Simon满分作文传送门系列】Simon满分大作文详解1【雅思索官Simon满分作文传送门系列】Simon满分小作文详解1【雅思索官Simon满分作文传送门系列】Simon满分小作文详解2【雅思索官Simon满分作文传送门系列】Simon满分大作文详解2【雅思索官Simon满分作文传送门系列】Simon满分小作文详解3【雅思索官Simon满分作文传送门系列】Simon满分小作文详解4【雅思索官Simon满分作文传送门系列】Simon满分大作文详解4