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托福作文写作范文详解题目:Successfulsportsprofessionalscanearnagreatdealmoremoneythanpeopleinotherimportantprofessions.Somepeoplethinkthisisfullyjustifiedwhileothersthinkitisunfair.Discussboththeseviewsandgiveyourownopinion.话题和题型分类工作类；双边讨论题型题目分析运动员收入高是否公平思路提示A.公平运动员年轻的时候体力消耗大，年老后患有职业病没有一技之长，退役后很难找工作为国家做贡献，给青少年起着榜样作用B.不公平工资的高低应有所承担的社会责任来决定科学家和国家领导人的贡献比运动员更大SampleAnswerAsaresultofconstantmediaattention,sportsprofessionalshavebecomestarsandcelebrities,andthoseatthetoparepaidhugesalaries.Somepeoplethinkthisisfullyjustifiedforsuccessfulsportsprofessionalstoearnmuchmoremoneythanpeopleinotherimportantprofessionswhileotherholdanoppositeviews.Iaminfavoroftheviewthatitisfairforsportsprofessionalstoearnagreatdealofmoney.（首段开篇摆明观点:成功的运动员获得巨额的收入是合乎情理的）Manypeoplefindtheirrewardsunfair,especiallywhencomparingthesesupersalarieswiththoseoftopsurgeonsorresearchscientists,orevenleadingpoliticianswhohavetheresponsibilityofgoverningthecountry.Howeverzathletes/salariesarenotdeterminedbyconsideringthecontributiontosocietyapersonmakeszorthelevelofresponsibilityheorsheholds.Instead,theyreflectthepublicpopularityofthesportingeneralandthelevelofpublicsupportthatsuccessfulstarscangenerate.Sothenotionof“fairness“isnottheissue.（文章第二段从作者观点的反面切入，再进行正面论述，使得论述更加客观辩证）Thosewhofeelthatsportsstars'salariesarejustifiedmightarguethatthenumberofprofessionalswithrealtalentisveryfewzandthemoneyisrecognitionoftheskillsanddedicationapersonneedstobesuccessful.Competitionisconstantandaplayeristestedeverytimetheyperformintheirrelativelyshortcareer.Thepressurefromthemediaisintenseandthereislittleprivacyoutofthespotlight.Thusallofthesefactorsmayjustifythehugeearnings.（本段是文章第三段列出三个论据论证作者观点）Personally,Ithinkthattheamountofmoneysuchsportsstarsisjustifiednotonlybecauseoftheburdenfrommediaandthepublic,butalsobecauseoftheintensityoftrainingandcompetition.Thehugesalaryalsoindicatesthatoursocietyplacesmuchvalueonsport.（最后一段总结全文突出观点）满分要素剖析：语言表达本文的语言简洁明了观点清晰,文中一系列的连接词使得文章更加连贯:howeverzso,insteadzthuszbutoSomepeoplethinkthisisfullyjustifiedforsuccessfulsportsprofessionalstoearnmuchmoremoneythanpeopleinotherimportantprofessionswhileotherholdanoppositeviews.Iaminfavoroftheviewthatitisfairforsportsprofessionalstoearnagreatdealofmoney.句型Iaminfavoroftheviewthat可用于议论文开头提出观点。逻辑结构本文是总分总结构的议论文。开篇先陈述事实并表达观点，第二段从反面切入后转向正面，第三段继续从正面论述观点，使得论证更加客观严谨。第四段对全文进行总结，并重申自己的观点。ReadingAnimalfossilsusuallyprovideverylittleopportunitytostudytheactualanimaltissues,becauseinfossilstheanimals'livingtissueshavebeenlargelyreplacedbyminerals.Thus,scientistswereveryexcitedrecentlywhenitappearedthata70-million-year-oldfossilofTyrannosaurusrex(T.rex)zadinosaur,mightstillcontainremainsoftheactualtissuesoftheanimal.ThediscoverywasmadewhenresearchersdeliberatelybrokeopentheT.rexzslegboneztherebyexposingitsinsidestorevealmaterialsthatseemtoberemainsofbloodvessels,redbloodcells,andcollagenmatrix.First,thebreakingofthefossilizedlegbonerevealedmanysmallbranchingchannelsinside,whichprobablycorrespondtohollowsintheboneswherebloodvesselswereoncelocated.Theexcitingfindingwasthepresenceofasoft,flexibleorganicsubstanceinsidethechannels.ThissoftsubstancemayverywellrepresenttheremainsoftheactualbloodvesselsofT.rex.Second,microscopicexaminationofthevariouspartsoftheinnerbonerevealedthepresenceofspheresthatcouldbetheremainsofredbloodcells.Testsshowedthatthespherescontainediron-amaterialvitaltotheroleofredbloodcellsintransportingoxygentotissues.Moreover,thesphereshaddarkredcenters(substanceswithirontendtobereddishincolor)andwerealsoaboutthesizeofredbloodcells.Third,scientistsperformedatestonthedinosaurlegbonethatshowedthatitcontainedcollagen.Collagenisafibrousproteinthatisamaincomponentoflivingbonetissue,inwhichitformsaso-calledcollagenmatrix.Collagen(oritschemicalderivatives)isexactlythekindofbiochemicalmaterialthatonewouldexpecttofindinassociationwithbonetissue.ListeningAsmuchaswewouldliketohavetheremainsofactualdinosaurtissue,therearesoundreasonsforbeingskepticaloftheidentificationsmadeinthereading.First,thesoft,flexiblesubstanceinsidethebonechannelsisnztnecessarilytheremainsofbloodvessels.Itismuchmorelikelytobesomethingelse.Ijkewhat?Youmightsay.Wellzlongafteranorganismisdied,bacteriasometimescolonizehollows,emptyareasinbones,likethechannelsthatonceheldbloodvessels.Whenbacterialivedinsidebones,theyoftenleavebehindtracesoforganicmaterial.Whattheresearchersinthereadingareidentifyingasbloodvesselsmightjustbetracesofsoftandmoistresidueleftbybacteriacolonies.Allright.Whatabouttheiron-filledspheres?Well,theproblemisthatscientistsfoundidenticalreddishspheresinfossilsofotheranimalsfoundinthesameplace.Thatincludesfossilsofprimitiveanimalsthatdidnothaveanyredbloodcellswhentheywerealive.Clearlyzifthesespheresappearinorganismsthatdidnothaveanyredbloodcells,thenthespherescannotbetheremainsofredbloodcells.Thespheresprobablyhaveaverydifferentorigin.Theyareprobablyjustpiecesofreddishmineral.Third,thecollagen.Theproblemisthatwehaveneverfoundcollageninanimalremainsthata